What About My Online Dating Profile Isn’t Working For Me?

My skin is white as porcelain
Between the cold sores on my chin.

My hair grows thick and lustrous red,
Most everywhere but on my head. 

My eyes are wide and clearest blue,
And ooze the most entrancing goo.

My laugh is like a birdie’s tweet
When it’s been crushed ‘neath someone’s feet.

My chest is pert, my tummy flat
Beneath three hundred pounds of fat.

My breath smells sweet as breeze in May
In New York on trash pick-up day.

I know about the birds and bees —
I have a dozen STDs,

And am as skilled and fun in bed
As any corpse that lies there, dead.

My sense of humor is a wonder,
The cause of many a social blunder.

Kind and patient, loyal and true…
These words don’t describe me! How about you?

I am as talented and smart
As is a football player’s fart.

Guys say I could be thought pretty
If the last girl in the city.

My date last night did not even retch –
So message me quick, for I am a catch!

Why am I still single?  Thoughts?

97 Comments

  1. Your iambs are breathtaking. I don’t understand WHAT they are all waiting for.

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    1. Maybe it’s because they get a little shaky in the last few couplets. Men on dating sites are notoriously picky about scansion.

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  2. I can’t stop laughing. No idea why u r still single, but keep on writing, I really enjoyed reading! 🙂

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  3. Very nice. So creative! And I was ready to really help assess the situation when I clicked through.

    Crystal
    http://www.crystalspins.com

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  4. Well we at least know there’s nothing wrong with your writing. So you can cross that off the list…

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  5. Well you definitely know how to make someone giggle! That’s a start 🙂

    http://www.notcomplicated.wordpress.com

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  6. Hilarious! At least you sound like you have a great personality and sense of humor… underneath those 300 pounds haha.

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  7. And one thing more
    I’m not a bore;
    And if I’m bad
    I’m always sad.
    If you could like me,
    Just a little
    I’d be so glad
    And cease to fiddle
    Rave and rant,
    And start to pant
    For fear and favour
    For one gallant!
    (with apologies to versifiers wherever found)

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  8. LB Darling

    OMG! I’m so glad I stumbled on to this post this morning. You really made me laugh! Bravo! Are you a fan of “Mad TV” and their “Lowered Expectations” skits by any chance????

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    1. Oh, yes – I’d forgotten about those!

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  9. Kristina

    Too funny! And here I thought you needed help rewriting your profile!

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  10. This post is hilarious! It’s definitely not your sense of humor that needs critiquing!

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  11. That was great! I would advise you to pretend it’s opposite day every day, at least on your social sites:)

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  12. Online dating is serious business and shouldn’t be distracted with humor. My appraisal is that your looks are fine but it’s the humor that’s doing you in.

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    1. Well, I have always been terrible at any serious business, as my bank account can attest. 😦

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    2. @Wordsfromawoman – If the person doesn’t find this funny then he can take a hike, I’m assuming she’s looking for a guy with humor. Online Dating is a dead end anyway. My friend tried that for years and ending up with such bad bad choices.

      Loved this, really entertaining.

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  13. hahahha… i need a long long time 2 stop laguhin’ here. maybe u still single but so many secret admirer of u 😉

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  14. Perfect. Anyone who has been on an online dating site can relate.

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  15. You have just described the majority of profiles on plenty of fish! LOL 🙂

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  16. My hair grows thick and lustrous red,
    Most everywhere but on my head.

    I can tell this from your profile? Link, please. 🙂

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    1. Just picture a Yeti in a bathing cap.

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  17. Very good! I am still smiling!

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  18. Ahh, the perfect girl minus the “tiny” flaws lol

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  19. Hilarious! God only knows why no one has snapped you up! 🙂

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  20. The best relationship a person can have is with themselves…….http://constance100percent.wordpress.com/2010/07/17/hugging-myself/

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  21. The Alchemist

    Hilarious 🙂 You aleast ave a great sense of humor!!!
    Keep writng!
    http://myworldrevolvesaroundyou.wordpress.com/

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  22. jdschaefer

    Love your imagery! Hopefully someone catches onto your talent.

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  23. Patricia Mahler Vazquez

    But, seriously, folks– as a veteran online dater — admittedly extremely scarred and bitter–
    I have NO freaking idea what men are looking for and what makes them actually attempt to
    date someone online. And if you actually ASK one of them to honestly tell you what they
    are looking for and what the crieteria is for picking someone out to actually talk to online–
    they don’t answer. Are they really ‘gormless worms’ and really have no idea what they
    are doing? No consciousness at ALL? I had a friend– note the word- HAD — who was a
    woman who had a hobby of getting online and seeing how many males she could get
    to email her, how many to ask her out– she wasn’t any better looking than me, the same age
    as me—but she was a great liar and a flirt. i should have hung around long enough to
    get her to ‘fish’ for ME. She didn’t want one– she was married–she just liked the hunt. Typical.

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    1. You two should work out a Cyrano/Christian deal!

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    2. Patricia,
      I could tell you but it would take more time than I care to devote and you would just label me as a misogynist anyway. I will give you a couple of hints tho. First from my personal experience far too many women on the dating sites are dishonest in their profiles as to who they are and what they are REALLY looking for or are downright evil like your married friend. And too many women feel like if they are decent looking they are “sitting on a gold mine” and don’t give a guy the time of day because maybe he doesn’t have a big job. Because they are shallow and lacking character they end up with a shallow guy and then when it doesn’t work out they bemoan “where are all the good men”? Ponder how many women actually sign up for dating sites as paying members Vs as non paying members. Good luck to you.

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      1. Well, hell, dude – replace “women” with “men”, and your comment is just as accurate.

        Also, if you find yourself making sweeping pronouncements about “women” (or about men) as if they are a collective body, that might be your first clue as to why you have trouble with them.

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  24. Ohhhhh I love this. Such creativity! You rock!

    -Lindsay
    http://www.thedailyawe.com

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  25. I’m still laughing. great post. keep them coming.

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  26. For online dating, you need a Haiku. Write one and your emails will be many, your lonely nights few. Do as I say, don’t do as I do. For the life of me, I can never write a proper Haiku.

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  27. Haha hellarious! Nice one 🙂

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  28. Love it! Seems like something one might read in “The New Yorker.”

    –The Well-Versed Mom
    http://wellversedmom.wordpress.com/

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  29. Wow. Very cleaver and witty. I loved it so much I had to read it to a friend!!!

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  30. Thanks for visiting all – and for your nice comments!

    I had fun writing this, and I really did put it on an online dating profile – needless to say, it has not gotten the response there that it has on my blog. 😉

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  31. I don’t understand why you’re not getting many matches. If I were male, I would definitely be into that profile. You had me at line 2.

    Cheers!

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  32. Very good – that reads like something from a Gothic horror story!

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    1. That’s what I was going for!

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  33. Great perspective on the thrills of being single and searching for that special someone! Looking forward to more of your creative writing. Thanks, LB

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  34. I have the vague notion that your approach to dating may be a bit too intellectual 😉

    Would you mind specifiying what STDs? Maybe we can work around that 🙂

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    1. Oh, all of them – even the classics!

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      1. Oh Elizabeth…, what man can withstand the thrall of a woman that indulges in the pleasures of syphilis?

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  35. WOW! Sounds like an apt description for the one that got away… or that I hoped would go away. 🙂

    I especially like the line about being as “talented and smart as a football players fart.”

    Classy. 🙂

    Congrats on Freshly Pressed, by the way!

    Natina

    http://humansareassholes.wordpress.com

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  36. This is A-M-A-Z-I-N-G.

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  37. this is absolutely hilarious!! i love it!! it reminds me of Dorothy Parker’s poetry, and she’s one of my favorites! you should check out her poem called “Symptom Recital”. I remembered it while reading your post 🙂

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    1. Dima – I adore Dorothy Parker’s poetry, and having my writing compared to hers is one of the most flattering compliments anyone could give! Thank you!

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  38. I often come across the same problem… what is about herpes flare ups that people find so off putting? I just don’t get it

    – Calhoun

    http://selfproclaimedmegalomaniac.wordpress.com/

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  39. CUTE!!! Ya think this is the problem??? Maybe??

    evelyngarone.com

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  40. Your words are fine, so do not pout.
    The picture’s all they care about.

    Congrats on Fresh Pressed, by the way.
    Your poem brightened up my day.

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  41. […] What About My Online Dating Profile Isn’t Working For Me? My skin is white as porcelain Between the cold sores on my chin. My hair grows thick and lustrous red, Most everywhere […] […]

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  42. Jim Hagen

    LOL
    I love you for your mind!

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  43. ROFLMAO!
    On-line “dating” like anything else takes practice and OMG! “honesty”.
    Too many males are too willing and/or shortsighted/immature to post parts of their private anatomy, I have found, somehow
    believing that it will attract a famle to bed them, not to mention a non-psycho chick.
    Knw what and who you want first, do not be discouraged by failures, protect yor security and privacy, post
    wisely and carefully, and keep the world in-mind…search far and wide; do your “homework” on what and who you’d like.
    You will, like I have, finally find what and who you are looking for. And if our post was totally tongue-in-cheek, “You GOT me!! LOL
    http://achilliad.wordpress.com/2010/07/14/love-poem/

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    1. Null, by doing homework on who you’d like, do you mean following them home and peering through their windows? Because if so, done!! :O

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  44. If you’d like we can do a photoshoot for this profile. I have a lot of proshetic hair we can glue to your fingers. xo

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    1. Oooh, and feathers? Plus, I bet you can do some awesome bloody sores.

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  45. Haha. That poem is amazing. LOVE it!

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  46. AMAZING! How can they not want to message someone like that? Men, I tell ya!!

    LOVED IT BTW!!!

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  47. sagerider

    …..hey,you can’t all that bad if you have earned a dozen STD’s. Just remember, dear there is someone for everyone. Just keep visiting the prisons on family day. You could make it 13!

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  48. I totally love this it made my night 🙂

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  49. What I liked most is

    My chest is pert, my tummy flat
    Beneath three hundred pounds of fat.

    You did it in simple, you can write different versions of this ( Love to read them )
    May God bless you, and Keep on writing.

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  50. Don’t worry too much about the online dating, I can’t tell you how many guys ‘closed communcation’ with me on eHarmony… to say the least, it was kind of depressing. It may be because you have great spelling and most people talk like, ‘I want u bad do u want me 2?’

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  51. You are an odd strange little woman… but very clever! LOL! Great post!

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  52. Sanjiv Khamgaonkar

    haha, brilliant!

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  53. HAHHAHAHA…no clue why your still single! Really funny! 🙂

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  54. Hehehehe… I wonder myself, why my online dating isn’t working for me as well. Maybe becoz my profile is not as “impressive” as yours. 😉 Well at least, people who read the description above might want to get to know you better, to find out whether you are telling the truth, or just… being honest. Hahaha… Nicely written. I like it!

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  55. this was quite entertaining, thank you.

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  56. Brilliant!
    Simply love it …

    THANKS!

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  57. The subject of great
    Thanks For Post

    http://www.almonizah.com/vb

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  58. it made me tingle

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  59. Hey, if you posted that on a dating site for ogres, you’d get more hits than Elvis and the Beatles combined.

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    1. A dating site for ogres is a pretty brilliant idea! I would be all over that.

      Probably have to wade through a lot of furries, though.

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  60. Is it too cheesy to say “I don’t know. You had me at hello..”?

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  61. Hi Elizabeth! Thanks for sharing, great imagination. Sounds like your ideal mate has to be a Sci-Fi fan 😉

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    1. Ha! More fantasy.

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  62. I loved it, I met my husband through an online dating service, a sense of humor is important!

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  63. Elizabeth, I like Your Poem, its good ! Http//Jendelakatatiti.wordpress.com.

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  64. greyzgreyz

    This post definitely made my night! Keep on writing, I enjoy reading this! 🙂

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  65. nonconformist00

    i love this!

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  66. Very funny profile! Any guy with a great sense of humor should be intrigued enough to pen a reply. This is more fun to read than 99% of the profiles I see posted. It emphasizes the importance of showcasing the real you in a unique way. You go, Girl!

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  67. pokynojoe

    Now you’ve done it! I’ve abandoned all hope, however slight, of ever having grandchildren. By the way, see you Saturday, I should be up there around noon, assuming the flight is close to schedule.

    Me

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    1. You have a grandchild – Thomasina!

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  68. Simon Ross

    Brilliant, it was so good I stole it for a play I am casting in the US. We have already sold 1500 tickets over 7 showings.
    Keep up the good work.

    Simon

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    1. Oh, Simon, you joker…as if anyone really buys theater tickets!

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  70. beansmcgee

    I have no clue why dear,your a fetch catch in my book

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  71. sayitinasong

    lol!! How clever!!! You are very talented.

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  72. Great Post !!

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  73. Haha…I love the cynicism. 🙂

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  74. Gosh, this is way too impressive. You might have intimidated the ladies. Tone it down a bit? Great read. Thanks!

    http://toponder.wordpress.com

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    1. Ladies sure do intimidate easily. I know, being a lady myself. 😉

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  75. […] August 18, 2010, I posted this poem, and I made WordPress’s Freshly Pressed page, resulting in my highest viewed day (2,408 views) […]

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